Hello, baby. How is
life treating you?
Buzzing bee,
is life a kind of flu
since you flew
away from me?
Tell me true—
are you blue,
are you blue
like me?
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Hello, baby. How is
life treating you?
Buzzing bee,
is life a kind of flu
since you flew
away from me?
Tell me true—
are you blue,
are you blue
like me?
Please visit Open Link Light at dVerse Poets.
This is such a feel good write for me–I love Salvia and it is blooming in profusion hereabouts–so you made me smile
Oh, good! It felt good when I wrote it, too. Salvia is a favorite of mine. Beautiful, long-blooming, and bees love it. And it loves bees. apparently. 🙂
Great.! I’d move the last line up to the bottom of the last stanza. It’s a great comeback.
Thanks, Walter. I thought about that, but I like it where it is, as sort of a lonely, wistful admission hanging out by itself. I appreciate the suggestion, though!
Lovely … and I can see that buzzing bee, and salvias what a wonderful imagery… (and I can definitely hear the bee) hope for great honey.
Thanks, Bjorn! I think this poem started from the sound of the words.
yes…….
Thanks!
playful…reminds me a bit of some of nikki giovannis stuff….
gotta watch those bees buzzing flow to flower though…smiles.
I know … bees are so promiscuous!
I sense an easy, expected parting with this piece…perhaps a logical separation
Yeah, maybe easy and expected with just a twinge of sadness.
Love its simplicity and rhetoric. Kind of saying “I secretly hope you’re as sad as me.”
Playful sound like a song. I like those. smiles.
Oops, very belated reply — thank you, Lila! Yes, I think that’s what the salvia is saying. The poem was kind of buzzing on my ear as I walked one morning. 🙂
..ah, i really really like this for its simplicity yet evoking such a deep sad undertone that cleverly camouflaged with the intentional rhyming scheeme… loved it… smiles…
Thanks, Kelvin! Yes, I think the salvia is more sad than it wants to admit, and there’s more rhyme than I usually have.
Simple and to the point, I like it!
Thanks, Ayala!
J’adore!!!
Merci beaucoup, Mohana!