The Carrot Says
I am the vegetable
you most want to see,
but honey, I won’t
make you well.
Come with me
and I will take you
back down to where
it all began, when I
waited in the dark
for someone like
you; I sent up my
leafy top like a
flag, a signal for
you to pull me.
Now, I’ll pull you
down to the dirt;
I still remember
where I used to
live. Don’t worry.
You’ll put down
roots soon enough.
After a while, you’ll
forget you ever
20 thoughts on “No More NaPoWriMo, But Here’s a Persona Poem”
wow…this is kind of frightening…made me think of an addict that met someone and they tried to “pull” him out of his addiction but instead looses grip themselves..very well written
Thanks! Yes, this carrot creeps me out, too …
this is rather haunting…nice play too on carrots being good for our eyes, yet yours take them away…cool piece…
Thank you! It took me a while to figure out what vegetable I was writing as, then I saw all the references to sight and health …
I feel pulled to invite carrot out for a dirty weekend, but jazz club — too much scotch, indiscreet behavior in the cab back to our hotel — not garden patch. What a compelling voice you’ve given carrot slash phallic symbol. (and if I’ve missed the point of this … I kinda don’t care)
Yes, this is one dirty carrot … I bet it would like your plan. The first two lines popped into my head while I was walking somewhere, and then this weird persona began to emerge. The hook of this dark-sounding song was in my head as I wrote: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XxQdVTjEMF4.
Well, then! That song certainly goes a long way to explaining carrot’s persona and distinctive voice.
Awesome and uber creepy, loved complynn’s comment and your replies throughout. Hope you are enjoying Open Link Night. Great to see you here!
I am, and it’s nice to see you, too! Thank you so much for telling me about it. In general, I’m still working out how many poems to post vs. how many to hold back (in order to avoid the “previously published” kiss of death), but I don’t think I could go back to playing everything so close to the vest. I like the crowd at dVerse, so I definitely want to keep doing Open Link Night.
Wow, strangely charming yet with teeth that bite terribly. This is such a cool write because itbshows the seducer at his/her best, charming yet waiting to destroy the joy seemed to promise. This is like an Aesop’s tale for grownups getting into relationships. Excellent write.
Thank you so much! I’m pretty sure this carrot is the creepiest persona I’ve ever written as. Glad you saw both the charming and sinister aspects.
Hmm, I see potential for a whole series of vegetable poems here. You could call it “Leaving the Garden,” perhaps. Carrot, of course, is the bad seed. The others avoid him–but some, like Potato, don’t have much choice. Disturbing but oddly engaging.
Poor Potato! She just couldn’t see clearly — especially after Carrot gouged her eyes out. I like the idea of nature’s sinister side …
Love this, and the voice of the evil carrot rings true. I may be totally off base (wouldn’t be the first time) but the last stanza makes me think the victim in this episode is a potato. Forget you had eyes… put down roots… underground.
It’s just me, isn’t it?? … I hate it when that happens
I was thinking that, too, by the end! At first, I thought he was somehow — and gruesomely — pulling a female gardener into his lair, but then I did imagine a potato by the last stanza. Sex and violence among the root vegetables … Anyway, it wasn’t just you!
this is very sci-fi….will they end up invading us like the Trifids?! oh what an imagination! I love it. Thankyou !!!
Thank you! What if they’re plotting even now??
but honey, I won’t
make you well.
Ha! fair warning then… What a great combination of sex and sinister.. I really loved the voice and mixtures you have going on here. Hardly about carrots at all.. 🙂
Thank you, Becky! The voice came to me very clearly. I love persona poems as a way to be someone completely different for a while. 🙂