He Said a Thing Once

He said a thing once
about horses.
She can never remember
just what it was,
but she said
it looked like it might rain
and that she’d better
wash those dishes
that were on the back porch.



Prompts from Poetic Asides (a “he said/she said” conversation) and Imaginary Garden with Real Toads (horses).


23 thoughts on “He Said a Thing Once

  1. Ha – this feels like those kind of disconnects between men and women, and here he feels to be longing for a freedom from the quotidian and she seems sentenced to it, a very interesting portrait of a couple. k.

    • Thank you! Yes, that’s what I think, too. Whether they’ve since broken up or not, I don’t know, but this was a moment when he was expressing something passionate and exciting, but she was so rooted in the everyday that she didn’t fully hear it.

  2. Causes me to wonder what it was he said…and then again…if the dishes took precedence…maybe not so important. πŸ˜‰ I enjoy the brevity and sense of immediate place in this. πŸ™‚

  3. Okay, first off, I love everything about this. That it’s micro; that it seems light and straightforward, but that it hides all kinds of backstory, understory, and dept; and that it reminds me of Brian Andreas. A sentence can absolutely be a poem … sometimes, the very best poem.

    “it looked like it might rain
    and that she’d better”

    To me, this hides “run” inside of “rain.” I think, she’s halfway listening to what he’s saying but mostly she’s thinking that she really wants to run off, with the wild horses, but instead she’s going to force her body to wash those damn dishes, even though it’s the last thing in the world she wants to do.

    You may not be saying this at all, but it’s what I find “between the lines.”

    EXCELLENT work.

    • Thank you! I looked up Brian Andreas and realized I’ve known his work forever and just didn’t know his name. πŸ™‚ And yes, there’s definitely that tension between the wildness of horses and the everyday of those stupid dishes. Run/rain isn’t something I’d thought of, but as we know, that doesn’t necessarily mean it’s not there.

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