In another world,
I’m still in the pool
and you and I have not
had words
everything is normal
there is no taste
of ashes in my mouth
and I can still write poems
about arguments
In another world,
I’m still in the pool
and you and I have not
had words
everything is normal
there is no taste
of ashes in my mouth
and I can still write poems
about arguments
❤
My life is busy, but you may assume I’m reading. Today’s, though, gets read and then used in class tomorrow even though we finished our poetry module weeks ago!
Thank you so much for letting me know, complynn! That’s incredibly flattering. 🙂
My life nailed to a T and exposed before me – how did you do that? Perfect!
“Exposed” is the same sentiment that many of my students had today, too!
Interesting! The feeling of being exposed is definitely in there. First, the pool was at a hotel where I stayed for a business conference that’s held twice a year but not usually in a location where I’d be wearing a swimsuit in front of my colleagues.
Second, the argument is with a person who is pointing out what he believes are very serious mistakes and errors in judgment, and part of what makes it so distressing is that part of me wonders if he’s right, and I’ve been hiding these errors from myself.
And finally, it was hard to write this poem because it was so soon after a terrorist attack and the distressing aftermath. It felt like I was exposing myself as a shallow person, to be writing about the pleasures of swimming and the unpleasantness of an argument that may be resolved fairly soon.
I wasn’t necessarily thinking “exposed,” but there it is, three different ways in a short poem. Very astute of MarinaSofia and of complynn’s students!
Thanks, MarinaSofia! And see my reply to complynn. “Exposed” is a key word here. 🙂
I could use some help redesigning the poetry module in our Literature for Composition class. Would you be willing to help me think thinky thoughts…quite soon? (“No” won’t offend me at all, btw.)
I would love to help you with that! What communication method would work best for you?
I have an at gmail acct. If you email me then I can send you my list of what and why.