NaPoWriMo, Day 21: Hay(na)ku

An invented form: One word for the first line, two for the second, three for the third. And repeat, if desired. For anyone who’s ever been second (or third) best …



am not
your best girl

I am
the one who

with you
here, right now.

we go
to the dance?

am wearing
my best dress

I know
I am second

or third,
in your eyes.

bought me
a wrist corsage

I love
it even though

wilted and
was an afterthought,

last one
in the case.





9 thoughts on “NaPoWriMo, Day 21: Hay(na)ku

  1. I like this form. The sparseness of words almost seems to make the depth of the message of being an afterthought more pronounced. Ironically, I guess that’s kind of like an afterthought too.

  2. Yes! And the references in the poem to “second” and “third” echo the structure, too.

    You know, I didn’t think I’d be able to come up with a poem using this form until I read yours. Now, I’m getting inspired! Thanks for another terrific read, Marilyn.

    • Hi, Marilyn. What a great poem. It works best when the hay(na)ku stanza and a complete thought coincide, as in the first stanza and second-to-last stanza.

      May I feature your poem-a-day blog in mine? I’ve been posting my own poems and a writing buddy’s as well as featuring other poets’ NaPoWriMo blogs. Would you take a look through my blog and see if you would be okay with the feature?

      Hope you say yes. You can respond by leaving a reply here (I’ll watch for it) or else a comment on my blog’s most recent post. Thanks.

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